[교환학생] 영어 작문 연습6 - 추수감사절 일기

1. 본문

Thanksgiving break (Origin Paragraph)

 In Thanksgiving Day, in almost 9 days, I traveled a lot of places in east of Canada and Seattle. Specifically, I visited Montreal, Quebec, Toronto and Niagara Falls in Canada, and Seattle in America.

 

 In Montreal, I remember that they have great transportation systems and transit card ‘OPUS’. I had to use transportation when I go to another place in Montreal, it was helpful. In addition, I was excited because there are a lot of places to visit such as Notre-Dame Basilica of Montreal. Therefore, I was satisfied in Montreal, my first place to visit Canada.

 

 Second place I went was Quebec. Unfortunately, I didn’t find transit card, so I paid only cash when I rode transportation in Quebec. However, I barely ride it because almost place could go by walk. When I was in Quebec, the weather was snowy. To see wonderful place with snow was fantastic experiences in my life. Among the places in Quebec I went, especially Montmorency Falls was impressed in my mind.

 

 Third place in Canada I visited was Toronto. As a big city, Toronto also has transportation systems and transit card ‘PRESCO’. Thus, it was great to go other places. Still, sometimes it was uncomfortable to use because their transportation system was complicated. Nevertheless, I could see many things in Toronto. Near the Christmas, you can make some special experience to visit Distillery District with your friends, family, or lover.

 

 Last place in Canada was Niagara Falls. I was surprised to see a huge and wonderful falls. Besides, Niagara Falls changed in late night, it was also fascinated. If you have a plan to go there, I recommend looking this in both afternoon and night, and Niagara Falls will show you different attractiveness. Niagara Falls don’t have various activities, but I could join many activities related to Niagara Falls and It was very fun.

  

 The last destination on my travel was Seattle in America. I stayed a day in there because Grayhound bus’ ticket on Sunday was very cheap than other days. I look around in Pioneer Square and Pike Place Market. Although I didn’t see in detail because of many people in Seattle, it was very interesting. Niagara Falls city’s night view was very impressed, but Seattle night view in Smith Tower also very beautiful.

 

 It was my first time to travel other countries alone with only some clothes and money. Sometimes I was in trouble or very exhausted, Nevertheless, I will never forget a valuable experience forever.

 

 

 

Thanksgiving Break (Revised Paragraph)

 On Thanksgiving Day, I began almost 9 days of travel, visiting a lot of places in eastern Canada and in Seattle.  Specifically, I visited Montreal, Quebec City, Toronto and Niagara Falls in eastern Canada, and then several places in Seattle in western United States.

 

 In Montreal, they have a great transportation system which has a transit card called ‘OPUS’. I had to use this transportation when I went from one place to another place in Montreal.  It was an efficient and helpful mode of transportation. I was excited because there are a lot of special places to visit in Montreal.  The Notre-Dame Basilica of Montreal was one of my favorites. Therefore, I was satisfied with my visit to Montreal, which was my first time in Canada. 

 

 The second place I visited in Canada was Quebec City. Unfortunately, I didn’t find a transit card available, so I had to pay cash each time I rode transportation in Quebec City. However, I barely rode it because I could walk to most of the places I wanted to visit. When I was in Quebec, the weather was snowy. To see wonderful places with snow was a fantastic experience for me. Montmorency Falls was the most impressive place I visited in Quebec.  

 

 The third place in Canada I visited was Toronto. As a big city, Toronto also has a transportation system with a transit card called ‘PRESCO’. Thus, it was easy to go places but sometimes it was challenging to use because their transportation system is complicated. Nevertheless, I saw many things in Toronto. During the Christmas season, one can enjoy some special experiences by visiting the Distillery District with friends, family, or lover.

 

 The last place I visited in Canada was Niagara Falls. I was surprised to see a huge and wonderful waterfall.   The flow over Niagara Falls changed late at night. It was fascinating. If you have a plan to go there, I recommend looking at the falls in both the afternoon and the night time.  You will find the different Niagara Falls displays attractive.  The city of Niagara Falls did not have various activities, but I could join many activities related to Niagara Falls.  It was a very fun visit.

 

 The last destination on my travels was Seattle in western United States. I stayed a day there because the Greyhound bus’ ticket on Sunday was cheaper than on other days. I look around in Pioneer Square and in the Pike Place Market district. Although I didn’t see a lot of sights in Seattle, it was interesting because of the many people.  Niagara Falls City’s night view was very impressive, but Seattle’s night view from the Smith Tower was also very beautiful.

 

 It was my first time to travel in other countries alone with only some clothes and money. Sometimes I was in trouble or very exhausted.  Nevertheless, I will never forget this valuable experience.

 

 

 

2. 반성할 점

- 전치사의 사용이 미숙했습니다 (예 - In Thanksgiving Day)

- a / the가 곳곳에서 사용되지 않았습니다.

- 동사의 과거시제가 적절한 부분에 사용되지 않았습니다 (단, 객관적인 사실에는 과거시제를 사용하지 않습니다, 예 - They have a great transportation system)